讀后續(xù)寫告別陰霾與媽媽散步的治愈之旅講義-湖南省名校聯(lián)考高三上學期10月月考英語試題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Haveyoueverbeensodepressedthatyoucan’tsleep?Youalsocan’teat.Youcan’tread.YouhavenofriendstocallupandnothingisgoodonTV.Soyousigh,pressyourfacedownharderintoyourpillow,andshedafewtears.Thiswasmylifetwoyearsago.Ihadjustturned14butalreadyfoundlifeastruggle.AsIlayinmybedoneSaturday,Mompeeked（瞄）intomyroomtomakeherregular“IsEmilystillalive”check.IknewthatifIspentmoretimelikethis,shewouldbegindustingme.AftersuggestingafewthingsformetodothatIimmediatelyrejected,Mommadehermove,“Emily!Getdressed!I’mtakingthedogoutforawalk,andyou’reingwithme!”“Why?”Iprotested.“Becauseit’llmakeyoufeelbetter.”

Thethoughtofmovingwasunbearable.IfeltasifallofmybodypartswereweigheddownbytonsofbricksIcouldn’trememberthelasttimeIhadgoneoutside.SomehowIfoundthestrengthtosliponapairofjeansandablacksweatshirt.Momwaswaitingatthedoor,leash（狗繩）inhandanddogatherside.Then,westeppedoutside.ItwasawarmMarchdayandithadbeenalongtimesincethewarmthofthesunhadtouchedmycheeks.Momledthedogandmedownsomedirtpaths,throughabigfieldandreachedHalseyPond.Butthesignsofspringhadyettoappearandthescenewasrathercolorlessthroughouttheentirejourney.“I’mtired!It’sboring,Mom!Whencanwegohome?”“Notyet,”she’dsay.Momstoppedtosayhitoeveryjogger,dogwalker,runner,andbicyclistwhopassedus.Sometimesshewouldgetintoaconversation.Theywouldtalkaboutweather,dogs,andallsmalltalktopics.Sheseemedhappy,andwasliterallyglowing（容光煥發(fā)）.Afterwalkingforwhatseemedanage,Momfinallysaiditwastimetogoback.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1:WhenIgothome,anewfeelingseemedtobeawakened.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:AnewSaturdayfoundmeaskingMomifIcouldtakethedogout.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________思路梳理：第一步：理解文章背景和情感基調(diào)問題1：文章的開頭描述了主人公Emily怎樣的情緒狀態(tài)？（關(guān)鍵詞：depressed、can'tsleep、can'teat、nofriends、shedafewtears等，表明她處于低落、孤獨的情緒中。）問題2：Emily的媽媽為什么要帶她出門散步？（希望Emily能通過外出活動改善情緒。）問題3：在散步過程中，Emily的感受有什么變化嗎？（最初的抗拒到后來的逐漸接受，以及媽媽的積極狀態(tài)對她可能產(chǎn)生的影響。）第二步：分析段落開頭語，確定續(xù)寫方向問題4：第一段開頭是：“WhenIgothome,anewfeelingseemedtobeawakened.”這句話暗示了Emily回到家后有什么變化？這種“新的感受”可能是什么？（例如：希望、輕松、對生活的重新認識等）問題5：第二段開頭是：“AnewSaturdayfoundmeaskingMomifIcouldtakethedogout.”這句話說明了Emily的情緒或行為發(fā)生了什么變化？她為什么主動要求帶狗出門？（引導學生思考她內(nèi)心的積極變化）第三步：引導學生構(gòu)思續(xù)寫內(nèi)容第一段：問題6：Emily回到家后，她可能會反思散步過程中發(fā)生的事情。她會注意到哪些細節(jié)？（例如：陽光、媽媽的快樂、與路人的交流等。）問題7：這些細節(jié)如何影響了她的情緒？（內(nèi)心的微妙變化，比如從絕望到希望，從孤獨到感受到溫暖。）問題8：媽媽會如何回應Emily的情緒變化？（引導學生寫出媽媽的反應，比如鼓勵、微笑等，進一步推動情感的積極轉(zhuǎn)變。）第二段構(gòu)思問題9：Emily主動要求帶狗出門，說明她的情緒有了明顯好轉(zhuǎn)。她會如何準備這次出行？（引導學生描寫她的行為，比如穿衣服、準備狗繩等，體現(xiàn)她的積極態(tài)度。）問題10：這次散步過程中，她可能會有什么新的體驗或感受？（可能會更加主動地與人交流，或者更加享受自然的美景。）問題11：散步結(jié)束后，她會有什么新的認識或感悟？（引導學生寫出她對生活的重新期待，或者對媽媽的感激之情。）第四步：組織語言，完成續(xù)寫語料素材情境1：Emily回到家后反思散步過程中發(fā)生的事情例句1：WhenIgothome,Icouldn'tstopthinkingaboutthewarmthofthesunonmyfaceandhowitmademefeeljustalittlebitbetter.Maybebeingoutsidewasn'tsobadafterall.例句2：Irealizedthattalkingtostrangerswasn'tasscaryasIthought.Theirfriendlysmilesandcheerfulgreetingsmademefeelmoreconnectedtotheworld.例句3：AsIlayonmybed,IreflectedonhowMom'ssimpleactoftakingmeouthadmadesuchabigdifference.Ifeltasmallbutgrowinghopethatthingscouldgetbetter.情境2：描述Emily情緒由消極到積極的微妙變化例句1：Ihadwalkedoutofthehousefeelinglikeashadow,butbythetimeIgotback,IfeltlikeIwasstartingtoseethelightagain.例句2：Atfirst,Ijustwantedtogobacktobed,butaswewalked,Ifeltatinysparkofcuriosityandexcitement.Itwaslikeasmallflameinthedarkness.例句3：Theweightofmysadnessseemedtoliftalittlebitwitheachstep.Bytheendofthewalk,Ifeltlighter,asifaheavyblankethadbeenremovedfrommyshoulders.情境3：媽媽的反應例句1：Momnoticedthechangeinmeandsmiledwarmly."See?Sometimes,allyouneedisalittlefreshair,"shesaid,hereyestwinklingwithpride.例句2：Shegavemeagentlehugwhenwegothome."I'mgladyoucameoutwithustoday,"shewhispered,hervoicefilledwithreliefandhappiness.例句3：MomlookedatmewithamixofsurpriseandjoywhenImentionedIfeltalittlebetter."Iknewyoucoulddoit,"shesaid,herfacebeamingwithencouragement.情境4：遛狗的準備例句1：ThenextSaturday,Ifoundmyselfeagerlysearchingforthedogleash（繩套）andclipping（夾?。﹊tontothedog'scollar.Icouldn'twaittogetoutside.例句2：Icarefullychoseabright,cheerfuloutfittowear,feelingasenseofexcitementthatIhadn'tfeltinalongtime.Ievengavethedoganextratreatbeforeweleft.例句3：Imadesuretoputonmyfavoritesneakers（運動鞋）andgrababottleofwater.Iwasreadytoenjoythedayandseewherethewalkwouldtakeus.情境5：這次散步過程中的體驗或感受（和人互動或自然環(huán)境欣賞）例句1：AsIwalked,Igreetedafewjoggersanddogwalkerswithasmile.Theirfriendlyresponsesmademefeelmoreconnectedandlessalone.例句2：Istoppedtoadmiretheflowersbloomingalongthepath.Theirbrightcolorsandsweetfragrancemademefeelliketheworldwaswakingup,justlikeme.例句3：Thesoundofbirdschirping（鳴叫）andthegentlerustle（沙沙作響）ofleavesfilledtheair.Itwaslikenaturewassingingasongjustforme,anditmademefeelatpeace.情境6：散步結(jié)束后，新的認識或感悟例句1：BythetimeIgothome,Irealizedthatsometimes,thesmallestthingscanmakethebiggestdifference.Awalk,asmile,orachatwithastrangercanchangeyourwholeday.例句2：Ifeltanewfoundappreciationforthesimplemomentsinlife.Thewarmthofthesun,thebeautyofnature,andthekindnessofothers—allthesethingsmademefeelgratefulandhopeful.例句3：Iunderstoodthatit'sokaytofeeldownsometimes,butit'salsoimportanttotakesmallstepstofeelbetter.Today'swalkwasareminderthatthereisalwaysawaytofindjoy,evenonthedarkestdays.【范文示例】WhenIgothome,anewfeelingseemedtobeawakened.Theheavinessthathadweighedmedownbeforeseemedtohavelifted,ifonlyslightly.Thesimpleactofbeingoutside,feelingthewarmthofthesun,andhearingthechirpingofbirdshadsparkedsomething