第三講銜接字句語意高度契合原文

第三講銜接字句語意高度契合原文一篇好的文章不僅需要豐富的內(nèi)容、巧妙的構(gòu)思和規(guī)范的表達(dá)，還需要把這些內(nèi)容聯(lián)系起來的語篇銜接手段。那么銜接包括兩個(gè)方面：字句連貫性(Coherence)和語意連貫性(Cohesion)。1．字句連貫性(Coherence)是指順暢、合理地把文章里的單詞、短語和句子連貫起來的技巧。首先要確保每個(gè)段落只表達(dá)一個(gè)信息或意念，然后將多個(gè)段落有序地排列起來。在續(xù)寫中，尤其是指續(xù)寫的兩個(gè)段落結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊、內(nèi)容有序；兩個(gè)段落和原文一起構(gòu)成邏輯性排列。2．語意連貫性(Cohesion)是指句子之間前后連貫、互相呼應(yīng)的程度。語意連貫性越強(qiáng)，越容易展示文本內(nèi)容及想要傳遞的信息。最佳的選擇就是善用連接詞，用連接詞連接句子并引出下文信息。讀后續(xù)寫需要關(guān)注的銜接有四個(gè)方面：①續(xù)寫內(nèi)容和原文的銜接②續(xù)寫第一段和段首句的銜接③續(xù)寫第一段段末和第二段段首句的銜接④續(xù)寫第二段和段首句的銜接eq\a\vs4\al([典題示例])閱讀下面的材料，完成以下任務(wù)。Mostyoungkidsareveryself-centeredmostofthetime.It'sliketheirbrainmetersarestuckon“selfish”.ThiscertainlyhaddescribedmeuntilImetmydeargrandmother.MyfatherhadbeenborninJapan,andhehadmanyoldphotographsofthepalatial(宮殿般的)estatethathadbelongedtohisfamilythroughmanygenerations.Hetoldmestoriesofgorgeousroomsfullofgoldenfurnitureandsilkwallpapers.Healsodescribedmagnificentgardens,fullofthesweetscentsofexoticflowersandthegentlethinstreamofgracefulfountains.Fromallthese,Ifiguredmygrandmothermustberich.IhadnevermetherbeforeshecamefromJapan,butateight,IreasonedthatifIwerenicetoher,shewouldtakemebacktoJapantoliveinluxury.Itwasagoodplan,Ithought,andIvowedtospendtimewithmygrandmothersoshewouldgrowtolovemeandwantmetoacpanyheruponherreturn.Wewenttopickherupattheairport.“Theresheis！”myfathercalled.Iexpectedtoseesomeroyalkimono-clad(穿著和服的)creaturelikeI'dseeninpictures.Instead,Isawatinywomanwithsilverhair,wearinganordinarybluesuit.Shedidnotlookwealthytome.Still,Ivowedtobeattentive,tomakemyselfindispensabletoherduringherstay.Togetclosertoher,IflatteredherintotellingmestoriesaboutoldJapan.Sheenjoyedmakingneedlecraftwithdelicatedesigns,andassheworked,shewovetalesofJapaneselegendsandhistoryasdelicateandbeautifulasthedesignsshecreated.Ilistened,fascinated.Herwordswereamixofthetwolanguages,soIdidn'tpletelyunderstandeverythingatfirst.Interestingly,however,asherEnglishimproved,sodidmyunderstandingofJapanese.注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Noonespokeofhergoingback,andIwaslikeanantonahotpot.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Mydreamsofaluxuriouslifehadbeenbroken.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________eq\a\vs4\al([解題技法])1．通讀全文本文文體為：2．一審——審要素時(shí)態(tài)一般過去時(shí)六要素WhenUntilI__met__my__dear__grandmother;__ateightWheremyhomeoutsideJapanWhoI;myfather;__mygrandmotherWhatMyfathertoldmestoriesofgorgeousroomsanddescribedmagnificentgardens.Ifiguredmy__grandmother__must__be__rich.Ivowedto__spend__timewithmygrandmothersoshewouldgrow__to__love__meandwantmeto__acpany__her__upon__her__return.Togetclosertoher,IflatteredherintotellingmestoriesaboutoldJapan.Interestingly,however,asherEnglishimproved,so__did__my__understanding__of__Japanese.WhyNoonespokeofhergoingback,andIwaslikeanantonahotpot.Why__didn't__my__grandmother__return__to__Japan？HowMydreamsofaluxuriouslifehadbeenbroken.HowdidIlearnthelesson？3.二定——定主題主題：Ilearnedthetruemeaningofwealth—notthegorgeousroomsormagnificentgardensbuttheloveamongfamilymembersandtheunderstandingofone'srootculture.4．三推測——關(guān)注銜接，尤其是段首句定基調(diào)(1)續(xù)寫內(nèi)容和原文的銜接原文段首：Mostyoungkidsareveryself-centeredmostofthetime.It'sliketheirbrainmetersarestuckon“selfish”.ThiscertainlyhaddescribedmeuntilImetmydeargrandmother.由此可知“我”是self-centered、selfish(形容詞),但是祖母的到來改變了“我”。所以續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容應(yīng)該集中于“我”改變的過程。(2)續(xù)寫第一段和段首句的銜接標(biāo)出第一段段首句的關(guān)鍵詞：No__onespokeofhergoingback,andIwaslikean__ant__on__a__hot__pot.anantonahotpot意為“熱鍋上的螞蟻”。根據(jù)此處可知，“我”非常迫切想去日本過奢侈的生活。因此，“我”會(huì)主動(dòng)問祖母的歸期，并得到祖母的回應(yīng)。(3)續(xù)寫第一段段末和第二段段首句的銜接標(biāo)出第二段段首句的關(guān)鍵詞：Mydreamsofaluxuriouslifehadbeenbroken．根據(jù)此句可知，“我”的夢想破滅了。由此可知，第一段的段末將會(huì)提及夢想破滅的原因。結(jié)合預(yù)測出的第一段的內(nèi)容，可知應(yīng)該是祖母的回應(yīng)使“我”的夢想破滅，此處就是第一段段末和第二段段首句的銜接之處。(4)續(xù)寫第二段和段首句的銜接根據(jù)第二段段首句可知，“我”夢想破滅了之后，作為一個(gè)小孩，“我”的反應(yīng)是感到失望和痛苦，甚至用行為表現(xiàn)出來。但是結(jié)合文章中心，“我”的態(tài)度應(yīng)該發(fā)生了積極的改變?！拔摇钡膬r(jià)值觀也從關(guān)注wealth轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)殛P(guān)注love。高效演練閱讀下面的材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。(2022·廣州高三年級(jí)階段訓(xùn)練)Therewasonceawonderfuloldmanwholovedeverything:animals,spiders,insectsandallsortsoflivingthings.Onedaywhilewalkingthroughthewoods,theoldmanfoundacocoon(繭).Hedecidedtotakethecocoonhometowatchitsbeautifultransformationfromalittlecocoontoabeautifulbutterfly.Afewdayslater,thecocoonstartedtomove.Itmovedfrantically!Hesatandwatcheditstruggleandstruggleforseveralhours.Butitseemednottomakeanyprogress.Thentheoldmanfeltsorryforthelittlebutterflyinside,aid.Withedtoitsaid.Withapairofscissors,gently,hecutalittleopeninginthecocoonsothebutterflycouldeout.Andthenthebutterflycameoutofitscocoon.Ithadaswollenbodyandsmall,fragilewings,butitneverwasabletofly.Hewasquitepuzzled.Hadheaccidentallykilledthelittlebutterfly?No,itwasstillmovingalittlebit.Maybeitwassick.Thenhedecidedthatthebestthinghecoulddoforthebutterflywastoplaceitgentlybackintoitscocoon.Hedidso,andplacedadropofhoneyonittosealthecocoon,leavingthebutterflytonestle(棲息)initsnaturalstate.Thenextdayhenoticedthatthecocoonwasmovingagain.Itstruggledandstruggled.Finallythebutterflybrokefreefromitscocoonandstretcheditswingsout.Itsbeautifulwingswerefilledwithwonderfulcolors!Ittookoff!Itwasflying!Thewonderfulbutterflyflewandflewtillitwasalmostoutoftheoldman'ssight.“Whatajoy，”heexclaimed!Butthenhestartedtothink:whatdidIdowrongbytryingtohelpthatbeautifullittlebutterflyoutatfirst?注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Finallytheanswercameout._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Sometimesstrugglesareexactlywhatweneedinourlife.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Onepossibleversion：Finallytheanswercameout.Thebutterflyhastostruggleandstrugglewhileinsidethecocoon.That'showitgetsitsst