高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)故事高潮的設(shè)計(jì)與開(kāi)頭設(shè)計(jì)

高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)故事高潮的設(shè)計(jì)與開(kāi)頭設(shè)計(jì)1．增加外部沖突增加外部沖突是一種明顯有效的可以達(dá)到故事高潮的方式。(1)角色之間的沖突【例如】Onthefourthorfifthnight，wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime，Momsuddenlygotagreatidea：Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetupatentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.【分析】開(kāi)車(chē)找旅館——徒勞無(wú)功——母親建議在他人后院搭帳篷——David和“我”倍感緊張，心有不悅(母子的觀點(diǎn)不一)(2)角色與環(huán)境之間的沖突【例如】ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim...hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall，butawolf，quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’s

heartjumped...hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal，andtoMac’srelief，itfellback，shakingitshead.Butaminutelater...Thenit...，tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime，andagain，itfellback...【分析】Mac騎車(chē)獨(dú)行，路遇惡狼，與之搏斗，險(xiǎn)象環(huán)生。[人(角色)——狼(環(huán)境)大戰(zhàn)](3)角色與時(shí)間的沖突【例如】Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Getintothecar.”P(pán)aulshoutedatMac.MacjumpedoffthebikeandslidintothecarwithoutdelayasthewolfwasjusttwostepsawayandwasabouttotearMacintopieces.Whatanarrowescape!【分析】汽車(chē)突停面前——急喊上車(chē)——Mac上車(chē)避險(xiǎn)——惡狼近在咫尺(此情此景，刻不容緩)2．放大內(nèi)心沖突放大內(nèi)心沖突(文中角色的內(nèi)心斗爭(zhēng))也有助于建立一個(gè)高度緊張和不確定的時(shí)刻?，F(xiàn)在我們?cè)賮?lái)看高考讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)中的內(nèi)心沖突是如何體現(xiàn)的。【例如】(原文見(jiàn)2016·浙江10月)Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janewassotired，hungry，andextremelyfrightened.Shethoughttoherself，“IfonlyIhadnotquarrelledwithTom.WhereisTom?Hemusthavemadetheemergencycall.WhatIneedisenoughcourage.IfIcontinuemyspiritstomorrow，Iwillbelikelytoguidethehelicopter.”Lyingbesidethestream，shefellasleepverysoon.Suddenly，sheheardtheshoutsoftigers，whichmadeherscaredtodeath.Aftersheheldherbreathforafewminutes，everythingwasquietagain.Intheterribledarkness，shesleptagain.【分析】夫婦爭(zhēng)吵——妻子獨(dú)自行走——荒野走散，夜色漸黑——獨(dú)處森林——陰森恐怖——后悔莫及(內(nèi)心沖突的刻畫(huà))——內(nèi)心獨(dú)白(往昔對(duì)比＋虛擬語(yǔ)氣的使用＋旁白描寫(xiě)是常見(jiàn)技巧之一)突破策略1開(kāi)頭巧用形容詞/副詞(短語(yǔ))[真題示例1](2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Unexpectedly,Ibeatalotofparticipantsandwonthefirstprize.副詞放句首，心理描寫(xiě)[典例剖析]根據(jù)該段首句內(nèi)容“幾個(gè)星期后,當(dāng)我?guī)缀跬洷荣惖臅r(shí)候,傳來(lái)了消息。”可知,開(kāi)始可以寫(xiě)作者得知這個(gè)消息時(shí)的感受,可以寫(xiě)興奮、吃驚或意外,本句用了副詞unexpectedly描述當(dāng)時(shí)的意外的心情。[真題示例2](2021·浙江高考·6月卷)IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.Excitedandoverjoyed,Irushedintomyroomandlayinbedthinkingabouthowtospendthemoney.

過(guò)去分詞的表狀態(tài)的心理描寫(xiě)放句首[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“我很驚訝,我爸爸允許我按照我的意愿使用這筆錢(qián)?！笨芍?本段可描寫(xiě)作者興奮的心情,開(kāi)始用excitedandoverjoyed準(zhǔn)確地描寫(xiě)了作者的這種心情。突破策略2開(kāi)頭巧用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞(短語(yǔ))、with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)或獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)[真題示例1](2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Withexcitedtearsinmyeyes,Ithankedhimagain,addingthatitwashewholetmegetatasteforwriting.心理描寫(xiě)+語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“頒獎(jiǎng)典禮結(jié)束后,我去了我老師的辦公室。”可知,該段可描寫(xiě)作者到辦公室感謝老師的表現(xiàn)以及老師的鼓勵(lì),with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)和現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)表示伴隨,增加了文章表達(dá)的簡(jiǎn)潔性和語(yǔ)言表達(dá)的豐富性。[真題示例2](2022·新高考Ⅰ卷)Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Droppinghishead,hewasinlowspirits.現(xiàn)在分詞，動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)，刻畫(huà)了David沮喪的心情[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“我們坐在一起,但大衛(wèi)不看我?！币约吧衔目芍?該段可描寫(xiě)大衛(wèi)不愿意參加比賽,作者鼓勵(lì)大衛(wèi)繼續(xù)完成比賽,大衛(wèi)經(jīng)過(guò)強(qiáng)烈的心理斗爭(zhēng),最終決定參加比賽,這里開(kāi)頭用了分詞充當(dāng)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ),不僅使行文簡(jiǎn)潔,而且突出動(dòng)作,惟妙惟肖。突破策略3開(kāi)頭巧用名詞性從句、狀語(yǔ)從句或定語(yǔ)從句等從句[真題示例1](2021·浙江高考·1月卷)Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.HowIwishedIhadnotactedsofoolishly,makingmyselfalaughingstockofmyfamily!

用虛擬語(yǔ)氣感嘆句“HowIwished。。。?！泵鑼?xiě)出作者后悔的心情[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“我被困了五六分鐘,但感覺(jué)要長(zhǎng)得多?！笨芍?該段開(kāi)始可描寫(xiě)作者是多么后悔把頭插入南瓜中,此處用了感嘆句,且wished后加了賓語(yǔ)從句。[真題示例2](2021·浙江高考·1月卷)Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Mybrothercameupwithanideathathecouldcutthepumpkinwithaknife.that引導(dǎo)同位語(yǔ)從句,引導(dǎo)故事向前推進(jìn)，也增加了文章表達(dá)的高級(jí)度。[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“我被困了五六分鐘,但感覺(jué)要長(zhǎng)得多了?！笨芍?接下來(lái)可以寫(xiě)怎么營(yíng)救。該句idea后面that引導(dǎo)同位語(yǔ)從句,對(duì)idea進(jìn)行解析,同位語(yǔ)使文章更加緊湊,同時(shí)增加了文章表達(dá)的高級(jí)性。突破策略4開(kāi)頭巧用倒裝句、強(qiáng)調(diào)句等句型[真題示例1](2022·浙江高考·6月卷)Astheycameinmydirection,Iputonmybrightestandhappiestsmile.NervousasIfelt,Ididmyutmosttokeepmyselfcalmandhandoutthedelicately-wrappedmealtothoseinneed,withmyhandstrembling.[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容當(dāng)他們朝我走來(lái)的時(shí)候,我露出了最燦爛、最幸福的笑容。可知,該段可描寫(xiě)作者是怎么為無(wú)家可歸的人施粥,這里“NervousasIfelt”用了倒裝句,提高了文章表達(dá)的質(zhì)量。[真題示例2](2021·浙江高考·1月卷)ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.Itwasmybrotherwhodidthatforamusement.[典例剖析]由該段首句內(nèi)容“這段視頻是在萬(wàn)圣節(jié)前一天發(fā)布的?！笨芍?該段續(xù)寫(xiě)開(kāi)始部分可以補(bǔ)充說(shuō)明誰(shuí)發(fā)的,這里用了強(qiáng)調(diào)句,突出發(fā)視頻之人。好題精煉--主題：人與自然--一堂別開(kāi)生面的科學(xué)課AnOutdoorTripThatSpeaksLouderThanARegularClassOneday,asJack,ascienceteacher,stressedthepressingneedforprotectingTangerineDarters,akindoffish,studentsinhisclassseemeduninterestedandbored.Jackcontinued,buthisstudentsshowedlittleenthusiasm.Hepausedforamoment,allowingthesilencetosettleintheclassroom.Thenhewentoninadifferentway.“Imagine,”

Jackbegan,hisvoicefilledwithpassion,

“thefeelingofwading(趟水)throughtheclearshallowwatersofPigeonRiver,surroundedbythegentlesunlight.PicturethecolorsoftheTangerineDartersastheygracefullyswimthroughthecurrents,theirorangebellies(肚子)shininglikeraysofsunshine,orinthatmoment,aTangerineDarterinyourhands,itsorangebellyshininginthesunlight.”

Hepaintedavividpicturewithhiswords.Curiositylitinhisstudents’

eyesastheybentforward,eagertoknowmore.Jackcontinued,

“Thedartersareverypickyabouttheirhabitats.Theplacewheretheyliveshouldbeveryclean,andslightpollutioncoulddrivethemawayorevenendangertheirveryexistence.”AsJackspoke,hispassionspreadquicklyamonghisstudents,whostartedtoaskquestions,wantingtoknowmoreabouttheTangerineDarters.Inspiredbytheirnewfoundinterest,Jackhadanidea.WhynottakestudentstothePigeonRiver,wheretheycanwitnessthebeautyoftheTangerineDartersfirsthand?Aweeklater,theywereonthetriptothePigeonRiverinCanton,NorthCarolina,wheretheenvironmentwaswellpreservedincomparisonwithotherindustrialareas.SunshinebouncedoffthePigeonRiver,andcoolwaterflowedoverrocksandboulders(卵石)—thepreferredhabitatofTangerineDarters.WithJack,itwasthefirsttimethatthestudentshadstoodintheshallowwater,eagertoseetheirtargetofthisfishecologyclassfieldtrip.注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Para1首句Suddenly,Jackbentandquicklycaughtafish.Para2首句Seeingthestudents’

interestedlooks,Jackraisedaquestion.主題：這個(gè)故事的主要主題是體驗(yàn)式學(xué)習(xí)對(duì)學(xué)生參與和理解的影響及喚醒孩子們的環(huán)保意識(shí)主題。通過(guò)讓學(xué)生走出傳統(tǒng)的課堂，讓他們沉浸在現(xiàn)實(shí)世界的體驗(yàn)中杰克展示了動(dòng)手學(xué)習(xí)如何能顯著提高興趣和理解能力。語(yǔ)言特點(diǎn)-生動(dòng)的圖像:"Wadingthroughtheclearshallowwaters,""orangebelliesshininglikeraysofsunshine."-感官描述:"Gentlesunlight,""coolwaterflowedoverrocksandboulders."-情緒感染:"Curiositylitinhisstudents’eyes,""Jack’svoicefilledwithpassion."文中心理描寫(xiě)和動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)心理描寫(xiě):-最初的無(wú)聊:"Studentsinhisclassseemeduninterestedandbored."-好奇心和興趣："Curiositylitinhisstudents’

eyes,""Eagertoknowmore,""Inspiredbytheirnewfoundinterest."-興奮:"Firsttimethatthestudentshadstoodintheshallowwater,eagertosee."行動(dòng)描寫(xiě)-杰克的教學(xué)方法："Pausedforamoment,""Paintedavividpicturewithhiswords."-學(xué)生參與："Startedtoaskquestions,""Bentforward."續(xù)寫(xiě)Para1:Suddenly,Jackbentandquicklycaughtafish.心理描寫(xiě)-Jack'sAnticipation:"Heartracingwithexcitement."-Students'Awe:"Eyeswidewithexcitement,""Amazementandcuriosityevidentontheirfaces."動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)-Jack'sQuickMovement:"Bentandquicklycaughtafish."-HandlingtheFish:"Carefullycradled,""Gentlyliftedthefish."Para2:Seeingthestudents’

interestedlooks,Jackraisedaquestion.心理描寫(xiě)-Students'Thoughtfulness:"Begantothinkdeeply,""Mesmerizedbythefish."-Jack'sSeriousness:"Toneserious,""Noddedsolemnly."動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)-RaisingtheQuestion:"Jackraisedaquestion."-StudentInteraction:"Onestudenthesitantlyraisedahand."續(xù)寫(xiě)范文Suddenly,Jackbentandquicklycaughtafish.故事開(kāi)頭Withagentlebutfirmgrip,heheldupaTangerineDarterforeveryonetosee.Thefish’svibrantorangebellygleamedinthesunlight,amazingthestudents.Gaspsofaweechoedamongthegroupastheygatheredcloser,theirinitialhesitationreplacedbygenuineexcitement.Jackcarefullypointedoutthedelicatefeaturesofthefish,highlightingitsuniquecharacteristicsthatmadeitsospecial.Thestudentswatchedintently,theireyeswidewithfascination.Seeingthestudents’

interestedlooks,Jackraisedaquestion.“Whydoyouthinkit’ssoimportanttokeepthePigeonRiverclean?”動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)--孩子們參與進(jìn)來(lái)Handsshotupintotheair,eachstudenteagertosharetheirthoughts.Astheydiscussed,

動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)--Jack老師引導(dǎo)學(xué)生深入思考Jackguidedtheconversationtowardstheimpactofpollutionontheriver’secosystem,makingtheconnectionbetweentheiractionsandthesurvivaloftheTangerineDarters.

動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)--孩子們的反應(yīng)Hecouldseetherealizationdawningontheirfaces—thiswasn’tjustaboutafish;itwasabouttheresponsibilitytheyheldinprotectingtheirenvironment.主題升華Jacksmiled,knowingthisoutdoortriphadachievedsomethingmoreprofoundthananyregularclasscould.【拓展訓(xùn)練】1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Mostpeoplethinkthatprocrastination(拖延癥)isanegativehabit.Butpeoplelikemewhoroutinelyputoffdoingassignments,arelikelytodefendour“slower”approachtogettingtasksdone.I'mtheonlyprocrastinationinmyfamily.Myparentsandsisterwereallbornwiththe“doitrightnow”gift.Theyarealwaysinarush,asifcloselyrushedbyaninvisibledeadline.Personally,Ipreferamorerelaxedpace.Whenmyparentsvoicedtheirconcernaboutmytendencies,saying“Don’tputoffuntiltomorrowwhatyoucandotoday,”“Noway!”Iresponded,confidentlypresentingmyresearchasadefense.Itsaidpeopleprocrastinatedwhentheyneedtosolveaproblemorcommittoatopicorproject.Inthesecases,delayingadecisioncanbebeneficial.Thiswasbecauseourmindscontinuetoreflectonproblemsevenwhenwewerenotactivelythinkingaboutthem,whichcouldleadtomorecreativesolutions.Myfindingsfilledmewithsatisfactionandpride.Mymethodofgettingthingsdonewasjustasgoodasmysister’s…orsoIthought.Atschoolwe’dbeentalkingaboutarchitectureanddesign.AspartofthefinalassessmentmyteacherMr.Smithannouncedanexcitingprojectthateachstudentwouldhaveamonthtocomplete.Wewereexpectedtochooseourmaterials,constructasmallbuildingandmakeuseofthingswehadlearnedinclass.Notonlywouldthewinnersreceiveextracredit,butthewinningconstructionswouldbeproudlydisplayedinthecafeteria.“IhavenocluehowIcouldgetitdone,”myfriendNatesighedindespair.Ididn’tsayanything.NotbecauseIsharedhisanxiety-butbecauseIwasnotnervousatall.Ilovedhands-onprojects!Picturingmybrilliantworkexhibitedinthecafeteria,IwasfullyconvincedthatIwoulddefinitelyproducesomethingthatcouldimpresseveryone.SorelaxedwasIthatIdidn’tgiveitasecondthoughtforweeks.注意：1.

續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.

請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。BeforeIknewit,Ihadonlyonedayleftfortheproject._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thattaughtmeagreatlesson._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Beaviswasarescuecatwhocametoourfamilyfromabrokenhome.Atthetime,Irememberthinkingthathisattitudejustmighthavebeenresponsibleforthebreak.Hisfirstthreedaysinourhousewerespentunderabedhissing(發(fā)出威脅的嘶嘶聲)andspittingatanyonebraveenoughtoapproachhim.Eventhenon-threateningofferoffoodorwaterprovokedanaggressiveresponse.Eventually,afteranumberofweeksandalotofpatience,Beavisdeigned(屈尊)tobeinthesameroomasotherfamilymembers,aslongashewasgivenhisspaceandwasn'tapproacheddirectly.Hisfirstvisittothevetwasanightmare.Thepoormanhadtowearathickleatherapronandindustrial-gradeglovesbeforegivingBeavisaroutineexamination.Afterthevisit,thevetwroteinhisnotesthatBeaviswasa“verydifficult”animaltodealwith.Atleasthedidn'taskustochangevets.Itwasmybrightideatogethimsomecompanionship.Drawingonmy“vastexperience”asacatperson,Ithoughtthecureforhisantisocialbehaviourwouldbesomecatcompany.ThesecondmistakeImadewasinencouragingmydaughterandherfriendtobetheonestochooseabarnkittenfromalocalfarmer.Asitturnedout,theycouldn'tdecidewhichonetopick,sotheycompromisedbychoosingtwokittens.ItturnedoutthatBeavisdidn'tneedcatcompany,butrathercameintohisownasakittenbully.Thelittleguyswerethreatenedateveryturn.Wehadgonefromaone-catastrophefamilytothree.Beaviswasunabletosharefoodoreventoiletfacilitieswiththekittens.Wespentmoretimekeepingthemapartthanwatchingtheminteract.Itlookedasthoughweweredestinedtosufferlong-termcatproblems.Oneday,Beaviswasstrutting(趾高氣揚(yáng)地走)hisstuffthroughaparticularlywell-fittingdoorinourbasement.注意：1.

續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為

150左右；2.

請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Hewasnotquitethroughwhenthedoorclosedsharplyonhistail.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Fromthenon,Ilostafiercecatandgained“asoftballoffur”.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為

150

左右。Oneverycoldday,notlongago,inEdinburgh,Iwasstandingatthedoorofahotel.Alittleboywithathinblueface,hisfeetbareandredwiththecold,andwithnothingtocoverhimbutabundleofrags,cametothemandsaid,“Please,sir,buysomematches.”“No,Idon’twantany.”answeredoneofthegentlemen.“Buttheyareonlyapennyabox.”pleadedthepoorlittlefellow.“Yes,but,yousee,Idon’twantabox.”Isaidagain.“ThenIwillgiveyoutwoboxesforapenny.”theboysaid.Atlast,Idecidedtobuyaboxtogetridofhim.Then,findingIhadnochange,Isaidtohim,“Iwillbuyaboxtomorrow.”“Oh,pleasebuythemtonight.”theboypleadedagain,“Iwillrunandgetyouthechange,forIamveryhungry.”SoIgavehimtheshilling,andhestartedaway.Iwaitedforhim,butnoboycame.IthoughtIhadlostmyshilling.still,therewassomethingintheboy’sfaceItrusted,andIdidnotliketothinkbadofhim.LateintheeveningIwastoldthatalittleboywantedtoseeme.Ifound,whenhewasbroughtin,itwasasmallerbrotheroftheboywhotookmyshilling.Hestoodforamoment,divingintohisragsasifhewereseekingsomething,andthensaid,“AreyouthegentlemanwhoboughtthematchesfromSandy.”“Yes.”“Well,then,herearefourpenceoutofyourshilling.Sandycannotcome.He’sverysick.Acartranoverhimandknockedhimdown.Helosthiscapandmatchesandsevenpenceofyourmoney.Bothhislegswerebroken,andthedoctorsayshe’lldie.MybrotherandIlivedalmostalone,forourfatherandmotherweredead”注意：1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為

150

左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Ifedthelittlefellow,andthenwentwithhimtoseeSandy.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ThenItookhimbythehand,andsaid,“Iwouldalwaystakecareofyourlittlebrother.”______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．閱讀下面材料,

根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段,

使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。This…wasturningouttobeastrangemeeting.Thoughtheoneinblackdoesn’tknowit,theonewhiteisbeginningtosharethedarkergirl’slackofenthusiasm.Likeafireinasuddenchillwind,herhopeflickersandwanes.Nowshegrowsuncomfortable,anxious,andwary.Aslightbutunshakableatmospheredriftsbetweenthem,onethatfeelsunmistakablyoff.Toher,itseemsasthoughtheirverymeetingissomethingtheworldfindstobesimply…“wrong”.Theever-presentglass,nowscatteredunevenlythroughoutandabovethebrokengrounds,reflectsthatstrangefeeling.Ordinarily,theseshardswouldflocktothemwithouttheirbidding：“happiness”tothegirlinwhite,“tragedies”tothegirlinblack.Rightnow,everypieceofglassintheairstandsstill.Perhapshalfahundredmirrorsarequietlysuspendedaroundthegirls,half-catchingimagesoftheemptyplacethatsurroundsthem.Whenthegirlinwhitetriestocallouttothem,theywillnotevenwaver.Itunsettlesher：happinessplacedbesidehorror,equallyglintingandequallymotionless.Theonlypiecethatwillfollowheristheoneshecanhold—theonethatsetherfree.Shestareshardattheshadowgirl.“Ifwe’reinthistogether,”shebegins,leaningforward,“thenwhatdoyouthinkaboutstayingtogether?We…Wecouldhelpeachother,andmaybe…”Shestops.Theothergirlisstaringintotheempty,canvas-likeskywithablankanduninformativeexpression.Shedoesn’tseemtobelistening,butintruthshehasfollowedeveryword.注意：1．續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:“Maybe…”thedarkgirlechoes.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Andtheremnantofthegirlsheusedtobe,theTairitsuwhohadfirstwokenupinthisworld,rebelledagainsttheprospectof“theend”—againsttheideaofgivingup.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案1．Para.1BeforeIknewit.Ihadonlyonedayleftfortheproject.InapanicIhastilyandquicklygluingtogetherwhatIpulledoutfromourrecyclebin,myhandsshakingwiththeweightofeachhastydecision.Thefinishedresultlookedmiserable.Severalofmyclassmates,includingNate,hadcreatedamazinglydetailedconstructions.Theyusedmaterialslikeclay,woodandsoonandwerehighlypraisedbyMr.Smith.WhenIsawtheirmodels,Ifeltevenmoreembarrassedaboutmine.ItwasobviousthattheyhadputalotmoretimeintotheassignmentthanIhad.Para.2Thattaughtmeagreatlesson.Ilearntfromthatdaytheimportanceofdecidingonmyprioritiesandbudgetingmytime.Fromthenon,Itackledthingsalotearlierinsteadofputtingthingsoffuntiltomorrow.Asaresult,notonlydidIfinishmytasksontime,butalsoIfeltbetterbecauseIdidn’thavetopanicatthelastminute.Attheendofthesemester,myworkwaschosenbyMrSmithonanotheroccasion.Seeingmychange,myparentsandmysisterweresoproudofme.Itdawnedonmethatgettingthingsdoneontimeinsteadofbeingaprocrastinatorreallycounted.【寫(xiě)作分析】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了有拖延癥的作者在面對(duì)老師布置的項(xiàng)目時(shí)，拖延到最后一天慌忙潦草地完成，結(jié)果很糟糕，作者從中吸取了教訓(xùn)，不再拖延的故事。家人對(duì)作者的拖延而擔(dān)憂，作者在無(wú)理地辯護(hù)。一次，大學(xué)老師提前一個(gè)月布置了期末任務(wù)，作者拖延到最后一天才匆忙潦草地完成，看到別人因付出了很多時(shí)間而受到表?yè)P(yáng)的優(yōu)秀作品，作者感到從中吸取了教訓(xùn)，不再做一個(gè)拖延者?！疽c(diǎn)解析】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“不知不覺(jué)中，我只剩下一天的時(shí)間來(lái)完成這個(gè)項(xiàng)目了。”可知，第一段可描寫(xiě)作者因?yàn)橥涎拥阶詈笠惶焱瓿勺鳂I(yè)，手忙腳亂地匆忙完成，結(jié)果很糟糕。其他人的優(yōu)秀作品受到了表?yè)P(yáng)，作者感到尷尬。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“那件事給了我很大的教訓(xùn)。”可知，第二段可描寫(xiě)作者為做到不拖延而做的努力和成功，更早地處理事情，不再是一個(gè)拖延者。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：作者拖延癥嚴(yán)重——家人為其擔(dān)憂——作者無(wú)理辯護(hù)——老師布置期末任務(wù)——拖延到最后潦草完成——結(jié)果糟糕——感到尷尬——吸取教訓(xùn)——不再拖延3.詞匯激活行為類(lèi)①.顫抖：shaking/trembling/quivering②.處理：tackled/dealtwith/handled③.完成：finish/accomplish/complete情緒類(lèi)①.

高度贊揚(yáng)：highlypraised/speakhighlyof/highlyacclaimed②.

尷尬的：embarrassed/awkward/abashed[高分句型1].InapanicIhastilyandquicklygluedtogetherwhatIpulledoutfromourrecyclebin,myhandsshakingwiththeweightofeachhastydecision.（運(yùn)用了what引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句和獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)）[高分句型2].Asaresult,notonlydidIfinishmytasksontime,butalsoIfeltbetterbecauseIdidn’thavetopanicatthelastminute.（運(yùn)用了部分倒裝和because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句）2．Hewasnotquitethroughwhenthedoorclosedsharplyonhistail.Heletoutabone-chillingcryandtookofftothefarthestpartofthehouse.Wemanagedtocornerhimandrushedhimofftothevet.Thevetperformedemergencysurgeryonhim.Everyday,Ivisited,feedingBeavisnutritiousfoodandtreats,hopinghewouldregainstrength.Undermymeticulouscare,Beavisrecoveredfasterthanexpectedandwasallowedtogohome.WhenIpickedhimup,Beaviswasnolongeraggressive.Hewalkedstraightovertome,nuzzlingandlickingmyhandingratitude.Fromthenon,Ilostafiercecatandgained“asoftballoffur”.Hisnaturechangedcompletely.Nowheinteractedwellwithallthefamily.Hewasareformedcat.WheneverIwatchedtelevision,hewouldsitatmyfeetandpurrloudly.Iwillneverbesurewhetheritwastheshockofthetailincidentormymeticulouscarethatchangedhisattitude.Happily,withhisnewoutlook,hewaswithusformanyyears.【寫(xiě)作分析】本文以一只被救助的貓

Beavis

為線索展開(kāi)，講述了它來(lái)到作者家后的一系列表現(xiàn)，包括最初的敵對(duì)、看獸醫(yī)時(shí)的困難以及有了同伴后的欺負(fù)行為等?！疽c(diǎn)解析】1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)門(mén)猛地夾住他的尾巴時(shí)，他還沒(méi)有完全通過(guò)?！笨芍擅鑼?xiě)

Beavis

受傷后的情況以及作者對(duì)它的照顧。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“從那時(shí)起，我失去了一只兇猛的貓，得到了“一個(gè)柔軟的毛球”。”可知，可描寫(xiě)

Beavis

性格的轉(zhuǎn)變以及和作者一家相處的變化。2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：尾巴被夾——送醫(yī)——照顧——康復(fù)——性格轉(zhuǎn)變——和諧相處3.詞匯激活行為類(lèi)①?zèng)_向：rushto/dashto②照顧：carefor/tendto③轉(zhuǎn)變：change/transform情緒類(lèi)①細(xì)致的：meticulous/careful②高興地：happily/cheerfully[高分句型1].Everyday,Ivisited,feedingBeavisnutritiousfoodandtreats,hopinghewouldregainstrength.（使用現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語(yǔ)）[高分句型2].Iwillneverbesurewhetheritwastheshockofthetailincidentormymeticulouscarethatchangedhisattitude.（使用了連接代詞whether連接的賓語(yǔ)從句、強(qiáng)調(diào)句結(jié)構(gòu)，被強(qiáng)調(diào)部分為主語(yǔ)“theshockofthetailincidentormymeticulouscare”）3．Ifedthelittlefellow,andthenwentwithhimtoseeSandy.PoorSandywaslyingonabundleofshavings.ThemomentIwentintothepoorhouse,herecognizedme.Weakashewas,hestillstruggledtositup.Seeingthis,Irushedtohimandpattedhimontheshoulder.Helookedupatmewithtearsinhiseyes.Withdifficultyhemurmured,“I’msureI’mdying,andwhowilltakecareofmylittlebrother?”Sadtearsstreameddownthecheeks.ThenItookhimbythehand,andsaid,“Iwouldalwaystakecareofyourlittlebrother.”O(jiān)nhearingofmywords,hewassosurprisedthathefrozewithhismouthwideopen.Hetriedtolookuptomeasiftothankme.Suddenly,thelightwentoutofhisblueeyes.HowpoorthelittleSandywas!Hewasdead.SuchisSandy,alittleboywhokepthiswordandsetagoodexampleforme.Iwillneverforget