【公開課課件】英語讀后繼寫課件36

ContinuationWriting---Howtowriteareasonablestory

11.Acknowledgebasicrulesofcontinuationwriting2.Learntoexploreusefulinformationinreading3.Learntodevelopcoherentemotionandlogicalplotline4.LearntopolishandupgradesentencesLearningObjectives2什么是讀后續(xù)寫？提供一篇350詞左右的閱讀材料（一般是記敘文，且以事件發(fā)生的時間為序）。根據(jù)該材料的內容情節(jié)等，續(xù)寫兩段，150詞左右（每個段落都給出了第一句），將其發(fā)展為一篇邏輯合理情節(jié)完整的短文。3讀后續(xù)寫考查什么？核心素養(yǎng)：思維品質：想象能力和創(chuàng)新精神語言能力：閱讀和寫作具體說來，四個方面：把握短文關鍵信息和語言特點的能力創(chuàng)造性思維能力對語篇結構的把控能力語言運用的準確性和豐富性4評分細則評分檔次第一條第二條第三條第四條第五檔（21-25分）與所給短文融合度高，與所提供的各段落開頭語銜接合理。內容豐富。所使用語法結構和詞匯豐富、準確，可能有些許錯誤，但完全不影響意義表達。有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫的短文結構緊湊。第四檔（16-20分）與所給短文融合度較高，與所提供的各段落開頭語銜接較為合理。內容比較豐富。所使用語法結構和詞匯較為豐富、準確，可能有些許錯誤，但不影響意義表達。比較有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫的短文結構緊湊。第三檔（11-15分）與所給短文關系較為密切，與所提供的各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接。寫出了若干有關內容。應用的語法結構和詞匯能滿足任務的要求，雖有一些錯誤，但不影響意義表達。應用簡單的語句間連接成分，使全文內容連貫。第二檔（6-10分）與所給短文有一定的關系，與所提供的各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接寫出了一些有關內容。語法結構單調，詞匯項目有限，有些語法結構和詞匯方面的錯誤，影響了意義的表達。較少使用語句間的連接成分，全文內容缺少連貫性。第一檔（1-5分）與所提供的短文和開頭語的銜接較差。產(chǎn)出內容較少。語法結構單調，詞匯項目有限，有較多語法結構和詞匯方面的錯誤，嚴重影響了意義的表達。缺乏語句間的連接成分，全文內容連貫。與原文劇情融洽，邏輯且合理續(xù)寫內容豐富有看點語法結構和詞匯多樣準確語句間銜接自然，結構緊湊5解題思路讀懂原文情節(jié)回扣原文，結合段首句確定情節(jié)走向組織細節(jié)擬寫草稿豐富潤色細節(jié)67Challengeyourself1.Dobearsattackpeople?2.Wheredidtheeventhappen?3.Howmanypeoplewerementionedintheevent?Whowerethey?6.Wouldthetwoboysindanger?4.HowdidSamandDavidfeelwhentheytalkedaboutthebear?5.Whatwouldthebeardowhenitsensedthepresenceoftwoboys?8Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily'scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle'sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle'sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor'sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown'sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn'tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam.

“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”9

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

10續(xù)寫的兩個段落的段首句（已給出）Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

1112Challengeyourself1.Dobearsattackpeople?2.Wheredidtheeventhappen?3.Howmanypeoplewerementionedintheevent?Whowerethey?6.Wouldthetwoboysindanger?4.HowdidSamandDavidfeelwhentheytalkedaboutthebear?5.Whatwouldthebeardowhenitsensedthepresenceoftwoboys?13Who①②attack?③feel?④WhereWhat

didthebeardo?⑤⑥danger?certainlypositive(yes!)David,Sam,parents,MrsBrown,policeman

thebearwouldattackthem.backyardofDavid'sfamilyexcitedandeagertoseethebearwouldbeindangerifnescesaryhelpwasabsentBackgroundInformationBackgroundInformation

14Step1精讀文章Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.出現(xiàn)熊襲擊事件，警察警告Sam和David渴望親眼見到熊熊非常貪吃商量以食物為誘餌吸引熊待大人出門時開始行動等待熊的出現(xiàn)時有點不耐煩了15Step2理清思路兩“情”相悅：coherentinemotionlogicalinplot情感連貫情節(jié)合理符合邏輯符合常識回找伏筆：情感和情節(jié)角色調度：沖突和配合16Step2理清思路兩“情”相悅：coherentinemotionlogicalinplot情感連貫情節(jié)合理符合邏輯符合常識回找伏筆：情感和情節(jié)角色調度：沖突和配合17Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”18

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

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“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn'tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

20developmentofemotionline情感線SamandDavidfelt_____toseethebear,andgot____whentheycan'tsowhentheyfinallysawthebear,theyoughttofeel_________sowhenthebearnoticedthemtheyoughttofeel__________butthebearwould__________thembecauseitwasfierceexcitedandeagerexcitedsofrightened/scaredattack

Para1Para2bored21excitedandeagerboredexcited/Para1scared/Para222Sam感到害怕了？說好的興奮呢？23tip:coherentinemotion!developmentofplotline情節(jié)線SamandDavidfelt_____toseethebearWhatwouldtheboysandthebeardowhenthebearcamein?whywouldthebearlookedup?whatwouldhappenbetweenbearandtwoboys?willtheboysdie?butthebearwould__________themoncetheysawSamandDavidexcitedandeagerattack

Para1Para224

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn’tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

25如果沒發(fā)現(xiàn)，如何和第二段開頭看見銜接？26tip:logicalbetweenPara1andPara2!第一段就已經(jīng)深情對視了？27tip:logicalinplot!劇情神反轉28Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”29熊壯慫人膽？熊被人喊跑了？？30tip:commonsense史上最佛系的熊31在熊的注視下表演裝死？32熊和孩子們分享食物？畫面美好得不忍直視。33腦洞開得有點大！34tip:logicalendingisappreciated!人與動物和諧相處？大圓滿結局?35Step2理清思路兩“情”相悅：coherentinemotionlogicalinplot情感連貫情節(jié)合理符合邏輯符合常識回找伏筆：情感和情節(jié)角色調度：沖突和配合36Dobearsattackpeople?Theansweriscertainlypositive.SopeopleinasmallcityinColoradowereconcerned.Why?Lastweek,alargeblackbearattackedafamily’scoopandatethechickens.ItwasreportedbyalocalTVstation.Attheendofthenewsreport,apolicemanaskedlocalresidentstokeepwaste,petfoodandevenbirdseedinside,andtoreportanybearsightingsuntiltheanimalwasfound.Thepolicemanalsotoldpeopletoalwaysstayawayfromthebearwhentheysawit.Samisa12-year-oldboy.Earlierthisweek,hecametothatsmallcitytovisithisuncle’sfamilywithhismother.Hisuncle’sson,David,wasveryexcitedaboutthebearthathadappearedinhisneighbor’sbackyard.“Sam,thereisabearinourcity,”soonafterSamarrived,Davidtoldhim.Samwascuriousaboutbearsandhehadalwaysdreamedofwatchingone.“Really?”heaskedexcitedly.“Yes.ItwentintoMrsBrown’sbackyardlastweek.Itateallherchickens.ButithadrunawayandIdidn’tevenseeit,”saidDavid.Samlistenedwithhiseyeswideopen.“Woulditreturn?”heasked.“Veryprobably,”saidDavid,“itwouldreturnforfood.”Atlast,heaskedSam,“Doyouwanttoseethebear?”Samimmediatelynodded.Thenheasked,“Buthow?”37

“Wecanputsomefoodinthebackyard.Whenthebearseesit,hewillcomeinandeatit.Butweshouldbecareful.Thebearmayattackusifheseesus.Soweshouldnevermakeanynoise.”Samnoddedagain,stillinexcitement.Laterthatday,theadultsallwentout,leavingthetwoboysaloneathome.Soontheystartedtotakeaction.Theyputsomeleftoversfromlunchinthebackyard.Thentheywaitedbehindthewindowofthekitchenandwaitedcuriously.Butanhourpassedandtheydidn'tseeabear.Finally,theygotbored.Paragraph1:Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.Paragraph2:Whenthebearlookedup,hesawSam.

38beforethebearcame(Readingpart)afterthebearcame(Para1)afterthebearsawtheboys(Para2)bearateallofherchickenDavidandSamexcitedandeagertoseethebeartheirparentswentoutMrsBrownateallofherchickenpoliceaskedandwarnedmightnoticethebear

finallysawitsoexcitedmightbeattackedsofrightened

couldaskthepolicecouldcometotheirrescuecouldcometotheirrescue39tip:addupsomelogicalplotsifnecessary!atetheleafoverattack?caught?runaway?

Step3擬寫草稿怎樣讓記敘文生動起來？動作描寫3-5個表情或心理3-5個對話1-2個環(huán)境描寫1-2個話題激活詞匯：動作：stepout,tighten,losebalance,shoot,apologize,forgive情感：excitement,curious,frightened,scared,fierce,ashamed環(huán)境：scenery40對話太多！分段太多！禁用涂改液！41Step4潤色成篇潤色包括動作情感環(huán)境類的生動描寫，豐富詞匯和語法句型的打磨升級等Tips:1.動作，情感，環(huán)境類描寫日常積累。2.豐富詞匯和語法句型日常積累。（時態(tài)語態(tài)，定語從句，名詞性從句，狀語從句，非謂語動詞，倒裝句式，強調句式，It形式主語句，虛擬語氣...）3.對話酌情使用，不要落入俗套。42

Justthen,theysawsomethingbigatthegateofthebackyard.

Uponseeingthebearcomingin,thetwoboys’eyestwinkledwithexcitement.Helookedintothebackyard.Obviously,hesawtheleftover.Hepushedopenthedoorandcamein.Helookedaround,andseeingnooneinthebackyard,hethenstartedenjoyingthefood.SocuriouswasSamthatheunconsciouslysteppedoutofthehouseinordertowatchthebearclosely.Itseemedasifthebearweresafeenoughtobeclosedto.連貫動作二/非謂語做原因狀語情感一動作一43動作三/倒裝情感二/虛擬語氣

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